Edgar Allan Joe

railroadsong by Kyal

Wow. I gotta say thats the best poem i've read so far in all my time as a member of the site (although it hasn't been very long). I enjoyed ...

I once met a missionary. And I asked him, "What's your position on sex?"

I really loved that poem. I think it flowed very well. In response to Graffiti artist I do not think you should make the rest rhyme, that would ruin everything. ...

Oh Moon Sphere of silver Tell me Why is it that I feel Like I can grasp you between my thumb and forefinger Like a cratered coin But every time ...

You know, I think the concept is good and all, but other than the corrections already made by Elinor Brynn I have one qualm. The peace is very, very clishe. ...

I'm sorry if this sounds mean, but the whole thing was very clishe. I think it could actually be good if you just put a more unique spin on it.

In the winter amidst the haze of the nostalgia of the better days Old men walk on their weakened bones some in groups and some alone To the cemeteries that ...

I have just one quick suggestion. A broken winged bird that can't fly is redundant. I think you should shorten it to A broken winged bird

Overall I think its pretty good, but I have 1 suggestion. You don't need to do the repetition thing. Your poem would flow a lot better without that. Compare: I ...